I've been walking a line with these cartoons where I don't want to make excuses ("I'm just learning!" etc) but the point of the exercise is that I am learning as I go, and so I want to be honest about places I feel shaky. So, you know, Pig looks a little sadder in that second panel than I think I meant for him to. And maybe that last word balloon could be a little more interupty somehow. Maybe it should just be "Over Here!"?
Dan Telfer
I'd have ended the pig's sentence with non-essential information for the punchline, so the word balloon could literally overlap the speech bubble and the words inside of it, the end obscured visually much as an interruption would obscure it... sonically?